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02 November 2010 @ 09:57 pm
NaScreeWriMo - Day Two  
I actually heard the phrase "plurality of tweets" on CNN.  It's the end times, folks.


The snow-cloaked peaks of the Carpathians loom all around. Mira leads a small WAGON, pulled by an old MULE, down a narrow lane. Dominik, heavily swaddled, is nestled into the hay filling the wagon.

Mira makes her way to the village center - instead of a marketplace or a town square, there is the CEMETERY. She passes it, hooking her fingers out and SPITTING to ward off evil.

She approaches a BUTCHER’S STALL. Freshly carved meat hangs, bloody mud underneath.

Greetings, Todor. I have eggs for you.
TODOR (50), the rotund butcher, waddles over to the wagon. He examines the eggs in one of the baskets in the hay. TOSSES one aside - it breaks.


Too small.
He cracks another into the palm of his hand, prods the yolk.

Look at this yolk. Barely yellow.

It’s winter. The hens have no grass to eat.
Todor wanders back to his stall, idly licking away the yolk.

Two baskets instead of one.
He HACKS down with a cleaver. The sound of metal against bone.

And in return I will get two cuts of
meat instead of one?

Don’t be silly, girl.

No deal.
Todor actually looks at her face for the first time.

What did you say?

One basket of eggs for one cut of
meat. No more, no less.

Who do you think you are? You’re a
cast-off. You may as well be an
orphan. Fuck you, and fuck your eggs.

Head held high, she leaves.


Mira’s husband, SAMUEL (30), drips a spoonful of thin liquid back into his bowl. He looks at Mira with disbelief.

What is this?


Where’s the meat?

No meat today.

I don’t understand.

Todor wanted two baskets instead
of one, so I told him no deal.

Do you have any idea how hard I worked today?
I need meat, Mira, not hot turnip water!

I traded Todor’s basket for some nails.

I cannot eat nails!
Mira gets up from the tiny table with a scrape of her chair. She pulls out BREAD on a wooden paddle from the wood stove, drops it in front of Samuel.

There. You can eat bread.

Why didn’t you just give him
the extra basket?

Because I will not be pushed around!
I will not let some fat lump
speak to me in such a way!
Samuel tucks the bread under his arm, heads to the door.

Where are you going?

To eat in the barn with the
mule. He is better company.
He leaves, a gust of wind blowing in snow. Mira shoves her bowl of turnip soup away.

A long, long table between Ilka and Bathory. She has put on a gown - it is too big, or rather, she is now too small. She does not eat, while the Count eats hugely.

My Lord.
(beat, raises voice)
My Lord.


I was hoping my Lord would choose
to visit my rooms tonight.
His only answer is a dark chuckle.

How can I give my Lord a son
if he never lies with me?

Why would I wish to lie with you?
Nothing but skin and bones.

I have been praying. I have sacrificed.

Sacrifice! What do you know of sacrifice?
He stands, KNIFE in hand. He gestures with it, tip always pointed toward Ilka.

God is not interested in your blood.
That child priest has deceived you.
Ilka avoids his gaze. Bathory stalks down the length of the table.

Your blood is weak, watered down
by sheep herders and outlaws.
He grabs her chin, turns her head side to side. Rough.

To think when I married you, you
were considered a great beauty.
He draws his knife blade down her cheek.

Rut with your priest if you like.
I will not visit your bed - you are no longer my wife.
The knife disappears into his SLEEVE, and Bathory leaves. Ilka sits a beat, trembling.


Ilka rushes down the hall. A SERVANT crosses her path - she points a shaking hand at him.

Bring me Janos!
Holly: Mary conhollywobbles on November 3rd, 2010 03:21 am (UTC)
"The plurality of tweets?" Ho boy. What on earth was the context?

The script's coming along well! Are you planning on ever finishing that "getting to know you" meme?
Shannon: ib landakungfuwaynewho on November 3rd, 2010 01:13 pm (UTC)
They were talking about, like, how each state felt about the Tea Party. So the guy was like, "and here in Tennessee only 28% of the tweets approved of the Tea Party, so clearly a plurality of tweets shows..." And I'm like, discredit the Tea Party all you want, but with tweets?!

Um...I'd forgotten about that meme, heh. Maybe I will! Maybe I will...
Holly: The Queen 2hollywobbles on November 3rd, 2010 10:28 pm (UTC)
Ohmygoodness, that's absurd.
nhpwnhpw on November 3rd, 2010 12:26 pm (UTC)
This is great so far! Though I'll admit I'm looking for the emergence of a strong female character (and figuring you'll give me one if I sit down and be patient a little bit, because I know you like 'em too.) Or... maybe there will even be two! It looks like both of these women might have it in them.
Shannon: btvs willowkungfuwaynewho on November 3rd, 2010 01:16 pm (UTC)
Well, if they START as strong female characters, then where do they go from there? Neo doesn't know kung-fu at the beginning of the movie, after all.

I'm glad you made that note, though; there's some stuff coming up for the two of them that now I think I'll need to temper a bit. Not too much, because it's important they go through the shit together, but I need to give them something, probably together.

Again, my kingdom for a thumbs-up emoticon. Anyway, you give the best notes that make me go "aha!"
nhpwnhpw on November 3rd, 2010 01:57 pm (UTC)
Anyway, you give the best notes that make me go "aha!"

Glad I could help. And no foolin' - you have just done the exact same thing for me when you said this:

Well, if they START as strong female characters, then where do they go from there?

Unfortunately, I think what this means is that I have to kill off Charismatic Leader Guy in order for the growth and development of his underling. You get three guesses as to who I've mentally cast as Charismatic Leader Guy, but you'll only need one.

Ten pages in - too late for re-casting? :(
Shannonkungfuwaynewho on November 3rd, 2010 02:11 pm (UTC)
Eh, I don't think you'd necessarily have to kill him for the underling to come into his own. I mean, it's the easiest way, sure, especially if they have a mentor-mentee relationship, but it's not the only way. You could do a reversal of fortune - maybe CLG gets cocky, too sure of himself? IDK.

Didn't you already tell me you'd cast Fillion in your head?
nhpw: truefacenhpw on November 3rd, 2010 02:18 pm (UTC)
He has Reynolds' attitude(ish) but he's 55-60 (excluding the prologue, set 18 years prior), so he has Bruce's face.

Shannon: b5 mira creditskungfuwaynewho on November 3rd, 2010 06:01 pm (UTC)
Speaking of casting, can you guess who I've cast in my head as my main character? I bet you can't. I bet there's no way you could ever, ever guess.

Also, referring to our earlier conversation, I found myself in the weird position of being stuck on the fic I'm writing, but blazing along happily on the screenplay. Weeeeeird.
nhpw: sdalmostkissnhpw on November 3rd, 2010 06:12 pm (UTC)

I found myself in the weird position of being stuck on the fic I'm writing

Awesome post-And Now For a Word-crying porn??!!
Shannon: b5 inquisitorkungfuwaynewho on November 3rd, 2010 06:19 pm (UTC)
Awesome post-And Now For a Word-crying porn??!!

Aw, no. I haven't started it yet; I'll wait till after I actually rewatch the episode. No, the third in that little series. After the Inquisition. I'm not sure how much of the in-episode scenes I want to delve into, or if I just want to skip ahead to him taking her back to her quarters afterward. Ehhhhhhh.
nhpwnhpw on November 3rd, 2010 06:58 pm (UTC)
YAY! That series is cute. I didn't know there would be more; I am happy-surprised!

him taking her back to her quarters afterward

Where there will be poooorn??!!


FWIW - that episode is pretty epic; I don't think a ton of in-episode stuff is required. I assume they will talk, and not just, you know, start fooling around (I'm just assuming there will be this) and most of the important in-episode could be covered in conversation, reflected on, referred to in the past-tense. Probably.

(You know this is just a helpful idea and not me trying to tell you how to write your fic, right?)

Shannon: b5 john c and ckungfuwaynewho on November 3rd, 2010 07:06 pm (UTC)
You know this is just a helpful idea and not me trying to tell you how to write your fic, right?

Where there will be poooorn??!!


No, like, see...hmm. I kind of think that I should be in Sheridan's head when he enters the chamber and actually sees Sebastian torturing Delenn, right? At least a snippet of that. But then it's weird to cut from that to after he's gone and they have the huggles. So that's actually a long stretch of episode to transcribe dialogue, urgh.

Which is why I just stared at my computer, like, please write yourself, fic. AND IT DIDN'T, THE BITCH.

It doesn't help that I wrote the opening with Sheridan in C and C, except that when I glanced at the episode earlier, he's actually doing shit with G'Kar or something? I don't know; I'll have to actually watch the beginning of the ep or something, which I never do. Siiiiiiigh.
nhpwnhpw on November 3rd, 2010 07:23 pm (UTC)
Fine, I will just write my own porn :P

(Probably for reals. I have something in the works that I've been shoving aside until I finish posting the AU and while I work on NaNo, but it's screaming to be let out.)

I usually watch this episode in its entirity, and not just for the squeeeeee at the end. It opens on G'Kar in the Zocalo. Delenn has a conversation with Kosh, as well. Sheridan might very well be in C&C when all this is going on, so you're not wrong. The first time we see him is in a meeting with Delenn and Lennier, in his office, where Delenn says she's expecting a visitor and wants him passed through customs without incident.

Shannonkungfuwaynewho on November 3rd, 2010 07:34 pm (UTC)
We can all write porn! (Though mine will probably be R-rated.) I must admit, I've admired your restraint in posting your AU chapters; usually once I finish something I'm like "up it goes!" even when it could benefit from chilling for a day or two so I can polish it up.

It helps, thank you! I don't know why I'm so worried about violating episode canon since in this series they're already together and shit; I have already broken away from canon, duh. Sometimes I forget about that kind of thing.
nhpw: sdalmostkissnhpw on November 3rd, 2010 07:49 pm (UTC)
Mostly I am dragging my feet because I'm still tweaking little parts of the final chapter and the epilogue, and now NaNo is in the way.

And there is also a tiny evil part of me that thoroughly enjoys the "I CAN'T BELIEVE YOU ENDED IT THERE" reactions. >:)